Eden

To sit with a dog on a hillside on a glorious afternoon is to be back in Eden, where doing nothing was not boring – it was peace. – Milan Kundera

I’m sitting on the veranda of the old mountain cottage, looking at the verdant valley when, through the deep caves of thought, I hear a voice that sings. It begs me to lose myself in the greenish-grey spruces and deciduous trees, to drift with the soughing wind while the sunlight burns away old memories and enkindles a bliss that’s oblivious to the darker workings of pride and treachery, of daggers in the night, and rage murmuring in the blood. Perhaps this is the second Eden—a seraphic paradise where instead of cherubim alighting on whalebone coloured boughs, giving human beings their salvific panacea, we’re one with the susurrating breath of nature, the soft, sighing voice of the greens, reds, browns and oranges while a gentle drizzle augments the sense of oneness, and the wild reclaims what’s lost, obnubilating the dereliction with its viridescent waves.  

Photo by Massimiliano Morosinotto on Unsplash

For dVerse

For earthweal



36 responses to “Eden”

  1. I had to look up obnubilating. That’s a fun word to pronounce. This sounds like quite a place you went to in this piece of prosery. I hope that this is autobiographical. It sounds so peaceful and nice. You painted a very vivid picture within the word limit.

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    1. me too! I literally just looked it up 🙂

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    2. Yeah it definitely is a fun word! This piece is autobiographical in its essence. I’m not at the mountains now, but there are times when I’m lucid and at peace with myself, immersed in my surroundings. Times when the darkness and the mental strain goes away. Thank you very much Tanmay!🙂

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  2. Im always in awe of the number of new words i encounter in your writings.
    Another awesome bit of writing. Luv the meld and the surrender to his surroundings.

    Much💖love

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    1. Thank you so much Gillena for your kind words ❤️

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  3. Indeed. Our souls must be the first thing rewilded. I love ‘viredescent,” and a great prefacing quote from a great writer.

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    1. Thank you so much for your comment!

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  4. Nitin, I’ve gotta know – do these vocab words just roll off your tongue naturally? Do you speak this sophisticatedly too? I’m so impressed at how you make these high level words flow in your lines… just amazing…


    David

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    1. 😅 I don’t speak this sophisticatedly. These words come to me when I’m writing. I think I’ve built up a vocabulary by reading a lot. I’ve wrestled with the prose of some challenging writers like David Foster Wallace, and I kept searching for the meanings of words they used. I guess it all got absorbed into my subconscious. I keep looking for new words too, but I often want to tone it down. Write simpler. Thank you so much for your kind words David 🙂

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  5. I must admit, you have me constantly googling the meaning of words when I read your blog 🤣.

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    1. 😅 Gosh, I’m trying to avoid purple prose, but sometimes I give in. It’s just that I love using new words and constantly throw them into my writing!

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  6. This BEAUTIFULLY and lyrically captures what must be our second Eden – available to us now, when we tune out the clamor and immerse ourselves in that “susurrating breath of nature”. Sigh. Therein lies what hope we have,in the beauty that is still here for us. Beautiful writing and the photo is stunning.

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    1. Thank you so much for such a kind comment! True, tuning out the clamour and finding peace in losing oneself to nature is what we ought to do more often. Thank you again!

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  7. I love the call to lose oneself, not-with-standing the inner naysaying voices, and the reference to the new Eden, a reset of life, a wholeness. Wonderful.

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    1. Thank you so much for your kind words. Sometimes losing ourselves to nature is the best medicine.

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      1. Absolutely agree Nitin.

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  8. Obnubilating was a new word for me, too. Is this is real place? Because it sounds so peaceful, this place where “we’re one with the susurrating breath of nature,”

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    1. I don’t know if it’s a real place. Perhaps it was before materialism, industry and technology ruined a lot of things. But it can be a state of mind Merril. If you go to the mountains, there are moments when you can lose yourself to their beauty. Thank you!

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      1. You’re very welcome. I imagine so.

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  9. Prose that makes one dig deep, find new word meanings, ponder. Cheers.

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    1. Thank you very much!

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    Susie Clevenger

    Oh Eden, may your second coming be what it should have been before humans desecrated you. This piece is deep. One I need to rest in, reread, and savor. Amazing writing!

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    1. Thank you so much for your kind words! They mean a lot!

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    Jane Dougherty

    Love those whalebone-coloured boughs!

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    1. Thank you! Yup they have their own unique charm to them.

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  12. Nitin, you have a gift with the words that you weave into your storytelling. Well done!

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    1. Thank you so much for your kind words Carol!

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  13. An Eden reboot, I love the idea. Beautiful prose, Nitin.

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  14. To be one with…yes, I think that’s the answer.

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    1. True. Thank you very much!

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  15. What vivid, lush imagery. I want to call this “silken prose”. Beautiful.

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    1. Thank you so much 😊 I love the phrase ‘silken prose’!

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  16. As a child, I used to love looking at the sky, doing “nothing.”
    When I try to have a seat on my walker and gaze at the sky as a disabled older adult, I am inundated with Very Concerned People asking me if I’m all right.
    I never thought it would be so difficult to do “nothing.”

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  17. Wow. Wonderfully written.

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