Fool

17th Mar 2023

This is the gully where that beady-eyed, fluorescent-shirt-wearing cowboy murdered you, after promising that you’ll inherit his ranch if you helped him get investors for his Ponzi scheme. That guy, with his southern drawl and his dark brown boots, had this nefarious aspect to him you saw through, but still fell victim to — the allure of an imaginary farm with Jersey cattle and shaggy ewes, drawing you. It didn’t help that he was Japanese Sinhalese and told you the farm was in a remote corner of the Artic: A viridescent, homely pasture rid of ice and sleet, reserved for you.

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Ordinary Person

21 responses to “Fool”

taurusingemini

Mar 17, 2023 at 11:46 am

Because you were, willing to, believe everything that he tells you, that is how and why you’d, ended, as you, had…

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Tanmay Philip

Mar 17, 2023 at 11:50 am

My latest illustration goes so well with your poem. It is not very good, but you can add it to the prompt one if you like.

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1. Ordinary Person
  
  Mar 17, 2023 at 6:05 pm
  
  I liked the samurai cowboy one a lot. I can’t use it here because we have to use the photo given sadly. But if you’re okay with it, I might use your art with a link back to your site in a future post. A Pinky’s Burger one (if I ever get down to writing it). And if you’re down, I could make you a minor character in one of the episodes.
  
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  1. Tanmay Philip
    
    Mar 17, 2023 at 6:08 pm
    
    Just ask me first before you post it. Some of my drawings are straight up copies (bad copies) and there might be copyright issues. I don’t know…
    
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  2. Ordinary Person
    
    Mar 17, 2023 at 6:10 pm
    
    Oh okay. Then I won’t. You could draw a burger with fries with a P over it, and I could use that if you’re down.
    
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  3. Tanmay Philip
    
    Mar 17, 2023 at 6:10 pm
    
    Sure 😁
    
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Laurie Bell

Mar 17, 2023 at 12:29 pm

Ugh, true, it’s worse when you don’t trust them and yet still fall for the scam. Nicely written. Great twist with the location.

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1. Ordinary Person
  
  Mar 17, 2023 at 6:02 pm
  
  Yeah it’s happened to me once or twice. It feels terrible. And thank you very much 😊
  
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Tannille

Mar 17, 2023 at 1:02 pm

Creative use of the 2nd person. You don’t see it often. 😀

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1. Ordinary Person
  
  Mar 17, 2023 at 6:00 pm
  
  Thank you 😊 I’ve been writing quite a few posts in 2nd person of late for some reason.
  
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susanrouchard

Mar 17, 2023 at 6:48 pm

Spine chilling atmosphere. I can feel his look drilling a hole in my will. Thank you.

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1. Ordinary Person
  
  Mar 17, 2023 at 7:20 pm
  
  Thank you so much for your kind words 😊
  
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poetisatinta

Mar 17, 2023 at 6:52 pm

so easy to believe and fall for all the lies, well written piece ❤

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1. Ordinary Person
  
  Mar 17, 2023 at 7:21 pm
  
  True. And thank you so much 😊
  
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Iain Kelly

Mar 17, 2023 at 8:46 pm

Atmospheric – the cowboy sounds like a great character.

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plaridel

Mar 17, 2023 at 11:19 pm

didn’t know why she fell for his words. too late to wonder now.

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Nobbinmaug

Mar 18, 2023 at 2:22 am

The promise of prosperity has been the downfall of many.

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rochellewisoff

Mar 19, 2023 at 6:59 pm

Dear Notes,

Some are easily deceived. Quite the epitaph. Nicely done.

Shalom,

Rochelle

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Bill

Mar 20, 2023 at 1:21 am

Excellent. I know there are people like that, but arg! Must we? 🙂

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britcanwrites

Mar 21, 2023 at 9:11 am

I guess the greedy cowboy got the investors and went off to do the same thing to another unsuspecting soul. Tut. Nice one.

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msjadeli

Mar 22, 2023 at 5:38 am

This is a perfect introduction for a revenge tale. The protagonist has powerful motivation and a hate-worthy target. Good story!

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